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My first chapter( completed version)?

I'm only fourteen years old :)

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1. I love it, your writing is beautiful. I can picture myself there perfectly. I spotted a few minor spelling errors, one, near the end, was the use of "than", it should have been "then". Good work. Keep going.
2. I sense a lot of thesaurus droppings.
3. oh this was really good! your a great writer! do u think your getting it published? u should. i really like it.
4. i liked the beginning dream A LOT...it was very interesting and kept me reading. i tried to read more, but my eyesight sux when reading so much at a time. i lost you in the middle cuz of that sorry. but you can actually write :) im glad cuz not many ppl who post their stories on yahoo can write...it was refreshing to read something that sounded like an actual book. i would read it :) i'm interested now. you should post more or get it published
5. Very good, you have a great writing style! Good luck! :)